10/11 home work
학생이 쓴 원문
If i redesign school, I\'ll make some trails which we can rest.Becuase when i study i am too tired to study.
and i\'ll make some market because i don\'t have market in school amd I feel uncomfortable
강사 첨삭
Hi Justin!
I like the way you kept things simple.
That\'s why your composition was easy to understand today.
Keep up the good work.
Simplicity is the best.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
If i redesign school, I\'ll make some trails which we can rest.
>> If I can redesign my school, I want to create places where students can rest.
Becuase when i study i am too tired to study.
>> It\'s because when I study, I get too tired.
and i\'ll make some market because i don\'t have market in school amd I feel uncomfortable
and i\'ll make some market because i don\'t have market in school amd I feel uncomfortable
>> I also want to have a market in school so that I would feel more comfortable there.
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