10/15 homework
학생이 쓴 원문
[What is something you would like to learn?]
Nowadays I want to learn an instrument, violin or cello.
I learned to play the piano when I was seven years old.
I stopped learning piano in my fourth grade of elementary school.
For a while, I lived forgotten about music.
But, recently I started to like music again.
Instrument sound makes me relaxed and becomes peaceful.
So, I thought I want to learn an instrument.
It would be good hobby.
It\'s great to have an instrument that you can play.
I am very interested in a happy life these days.
What is a happy life and how can I get a happy life?
I know that depends on the person.
But, in my mind, learning an instrument is also one of the ways to a happy life.
And I hope to always learn something before death.
Learning something makes me feel that I am growing up and becoming a better person.
So, I like learning everything.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]! Thank you for spending a little of your time with your homework. I appreciate the effort! ^^
I definitely agree with you. There are actually a lot of simple ways to feel happy everyday. One of which is learning how to play an instrument. Just like you, I always wanted to learn something new. Not only for fun, but I read it\'s actually good for the brain as we grow older. So a year ago, I started learning the Ukulele. It\'s actually inexpensive and very easy to learn. Maybe you should try learning it too! ^^
-Teacher Jedah
>>Nowadays I want to learn how to play an instrument, perhaps, a violin or a cello.
I learned to play the piano when I was seven years old.
I learned to play the piano when I was seven years old.
>>CORRECT
I stopped learning piano in my fourth grade of elementary school.
I stopped learning piano in my fourth grade of elementary school.
>>CORRECT or
>>I stopped learning piano when I was fourth grade elementary.
For a while, I lived forgotten about music.
For a while, I lived forgotten about music.
>>For a while, I have forgotten about music.
But, recently I started to like music again.
But, recently I started to like music again.
>>CORRECT
Instrument sound makes me relaxed and becomes peaceful.
Instrument sound makes me relaxed and becomes peaceful.
>>The sound of instruments makes me relaxed and feel at peace.
So, I thought I want to learn an instrument.
So, I thought I want to learn an instrument.
>>CORRECT
It would be good hobby.
It would be good hobby.
>>It would be a good hobby.
It\'s great to have an instrument that you can play.
It\'s great to have an instrument that you can play.
>>CORRECT
I am very interested in a happy life these days.
I am very interested in a happy life these days.
>>CORRECT
What is a happy life and how can I get a happy life?
What is a happy life and how can I get a happy life?
>>CORRECT
I know that depends on the person.
I know that depends on the person.
>>CORRECT
But, in my mind, learning an instrument is also one of the ways to a happy life.
But, in my mind, learning an instrument is also one of the ways to a happy life.
>>CORRECT
And I hope to always learn something before death.
And I hope to always learn something before death.
>>CORRECT or
>>And I hope to always learn something before I die.
Learning something makes me feel that I am growing up and becoming a better person.
Learning something makes me feel that I am growing up and becoming a better person.
>>CORRECT
So, I like learning everything.
So, I like learning everything.
>>So, I like learning a lot of things.
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