10/16 Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Good afternoon Mr. [이름]! Great essay today! You were able to express your thoughts today. Just go over my corrections for your practice. Have a safe day! See you tomorrow.
~t. KELLY~
Hi! good afternoon.
Today\'s homework.
\"Talk about how technology has changeed in your life\"
Basically,technology gives to us comfort and convenience.
>>
Basically,technology gives us comfort and convenience.
about twenty years ago we human being had dreamed to get wireless telephone.
>> About twenty years ago, human beings dreamed of getting a wireless telephone.
it was only a material of comedy program about that days.
>> It was only a material of comedy program at that time.
at least, our dream came true.
>> Correct.
These days most of people are use to a smart phone.
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These days most people use a smart phone.
that is so convenient,but people lose many times by that.
>> That is so convenient but people don\'t interact anymore because of it.
Sadly they are often addicted to the smart phone.
>> Correct.
I think that is very important problem.
>> I think that is a big problem.
addiction is very harmful for us.
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addiction is very harmful to us.
>> I guess the best way is to use it appropriately.
Thank you!
>> Correct.
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