10/16 homework

Hi [이름]! Thank you so much for accomplishing your homework. You are well appreciated. ^ ^ I guess most people these days can\'t really live without their cellphones. It has become somewhat part of our body, that without it; our day seems incomplete. ^^ But of course, so they say, we must use it with caution and with limit too. There has been a recent study revealing the damages with the use of cellphones. To mention, cellphones emit electromagnetic radiation which could be potentially dangerous to our health. ^ ^

-Teacher Jedah

I think most important one thing in my life is a smartphone.

>>I think the most important thing in my life is my smartphone.
Nowadays, we can do almost everything with our own smartphone; watch, TV, book, computer and so on.

>>Correct
Three month ago, my smartphone broke down suddenly.

>>Three months ago, my smartphone suddenly broke down. 
So, I couldn\'t use a smartphone for one week.

>>So, I wasn\'t able to use it for a week.
I surprised a lot about my emotional state at that time.

>>I was so surprised about my emotional state at that time.
I was very unstable, because I couldn\'t send any massage or call to anyone.

>>I was very unstable, because I couldn\'t send any messages or call to anyone. 
I realized I also have a smart-phone addiction that is one of the very serious disease for modern people.

>>Correct
From the events, I felt so many things.

>>From what happened, I felt so many things. 
However, I think it is not a good way that just we should reduce the time to doing smartphone.

>>However, I think it is not a good way and that we should reduce the time we spend with our smartphones. 
The smartphone is already too close with our life, therefore, we should effort to use smartphone positively.

>>A smartphone is something we use daily, therefore, we should try hard to use it positively.
We can learn something from youtube or many university online program.

>>We can use it in learning something from youtube or many university online programs.
Among them, I enjoy learn English in Youtube channel.

>>Among them, I enjoy learning English in Youtube channel.