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[In some cities and towns all over the world, the high volume of traffic is a problem. What are the causes of this and what actions can be taken to solve this problem?]

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 In Korea, some big city have a problem about the traffic jam. 

>> In Korea, some big cities have a problem about traffic jam. 

>> OR: In Korea, traffic jam is a serious problem in some big cities.
 Most urban city have same problem.

>> Most urban cities have the same problem.
There are many car and people in the cities.

>> There are many cars and people in these cities.
 In addition, there are just work place because the house cost is expensive in the city where have traffic problem.

>> In addition, there are just work places or apartments because the house cost is expensive in cities where there is a high volume of traffic.
 So, people usually live in the outside of the city, they move to outside after work by transportation such as car or subway.

>> So, people usually live outside of the city. They move outside of the city after work by taking a car or the subway.
 I think most important thing to solve it is the work place that is concentrated in the city should be dispersed in outside of city.

>>  I think the most important solution to this is for the work places to be dispersed outside of the city.

>> Or: I think the most important thing to solve this problem is to disperse the work places outside of the city. 
 So, nowadays, many government organizations are dispersing to the outside of Seoul in Korea.

>> So, nowadays, many government organizations are dispersing outside of Seoul in Korea.