10/2 homework
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[With people living longer, should the retirement age be increased? If so, what should be the age when people get benefits?]
I think the government should extend the retirement age.
Human life is increasing continuously and the old population is increasing too.
In my grandparents time, they enjoy their life with a retirement allowance after retirement.
I was possible because their average life was shorter than now.
But, now we have to survive without a job for the period that we earned money.
The retirement age was extended from 60 to 65 a few years ago in Korea.
A long time ago, 60s people were elders.
But, now they look young because there are a lot of the 70s and 80s people.
They should have a job and work to earn money to live and find a meaning of life.
Working is often bothering me, but, at the same time, it feels me I am a member of this society and I have a role to live.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]! Thank you for sharing! I appreciate your thoughts and the effort you put in this homework.
I agree with you, these days people in their 60\'s are still quite strong and still ready to face head on all the challenges in life. Age is just a number! ^ ^
-Teacher Jedah
I think the government should extend the retirement age.
>>CORRECT
Human life is increasing continuously and the old population is increasing too.
Human life is increasing continuously and the old population is increasing too.
>>People\'s length of life is increasing and so with the aging population.
In my grandparents time, they enjoy their life with a retirement allowance after retirement.
In my grandparents time, they enjoy their life with a retirement allowance after retirement.
>>During my grandparents time, they enjoyed their lives with a retirement allowance.
I was possible because their average life was shorter than now.
>>It was possible because their average length of life was shorter than now.
But, now we have to survive without a job for the period that we earned money.
But, now we have to survive without a job for the period that we earned money.
>>But, now we have to survive without a job.
The retirement age was extended from 60 to 65 a few years ago in Korea.
The retirement age was extended from 60 to 65 a few years ago in Korea.
>>CORRECT
A long time ago, 60s people were elders.
A long time ago, 60s people were elders.
>>A long time ago, people were already called elders when they reach their sixties.
But, now they look young because there are a lot of the 70s and 80s people.
But, now they look young because there are a lot of the 70s and 80s people.
>>CORRECT
They should have a job and work to earn money to live and find a meaning of life.
They should have a job and work to earn money to live and find a meaning of life.
>>They should have a job and work to earn money to live and find meaning to life.
Working is often bothering me, but, at the same time, it feels me I am a member of this society and I have a role to live.
Working is often bothering me, but, at the same time, it feels me I am a member of this society and I have a role to live.
>>Working is often bothering to me, but at the same time, it makes me feel a part of the society and has a role to live.
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