10/20 homework-2
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There aren't any friends who have gambling problems around me. But I often hear news regarding entertainer or star who gamble their everything away in TV
Because they want to get a money without any pains, they are easily addicting gambling. Gambling became serious social problems in modern society.
To some, what is worth giving up everything is their children.
My parents also often tell me that they can do everything for me. But I don’t know exactly if I have my baby, I can do that.
My mother is devoting my family with giving up her life. She lives for our family not herself.
I look up to my parents and want to be like them.
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There aren't any friends who have gambling problems around me. >>Correct
But I often hear news regarding entertainer or star who gamble their everything away in TV
>>But I often hear news regarding entertainer or star who gambles everything when they are away from TV.
Because they want to get a money without any pains, they are easily addicting gambling.
Because they want to get a money without any pains, they are easily addicting gambling.
>>Because they want to get a money without any pains, they are easily addicted to gambling.
Gambling became serious social problem in modern society.
>>Correct
To some, what is worth giving up everything is their children.
To some, what is worth giving up everything is their children.
>>To some, it is worth giving up everything for their children.
My parents also often tell me that they can do everything for me.
My parents also often tell me that they can do everything for me.
>>Correct
But I don’t know exactly if I have my baby, I can do that.
>>But I don't know exactly if I can do that when I have my baby.
My mother is devoting my family with giving up her life.
>>My mother is devoted to my family and gave up her life.
She lives for our family not herself.
>>Correct
>>She lives for our family not for herself.
I look up to my parents and want to be like them.
I look up to my parents and want to be like them.
>>Correct
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