10/20 homework
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Reducing family time to make more money is not good choice for our family, I think.Most people think the same as me, but they practically take time to make money.Because they feel that enough money can be make their family more happy and on easy street.
This is inconvenient truth. But if someone will be more diligent for their working and family, they can be get a credit for working and remain their family more affluent.It means that we have to break up our time for our job and family since we can’t avoid reality.
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Reducing family time to make more money is not good choice for our family, I think.
>>I think reducing family time to make more money is not good choice for our family.
Most people think the same as me, but they practically take time to make money.
>>Most people think the same way as I do but they practically take time to make money.
Because they feel that enough money can make their family more happy and on easy street.
>>Correct
This is an inconvenient truth.
This is an inconvenient truth.
>>Correct
But if someone will be more diligent for their working and family, they can be get a credit for working and remain their family more affluent.
>> But if someone will be more diligent in their work and family, they can get a credit for working hard and remain their affluent family life.
It means that we have to break up our time for our job and family since we can’t avoid reality.
>>It means that we have to break up our time for our job and family since we can't avoid the reality.
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