10/21 homework
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[What do you think you can do for yourself to help you age better with improved mobility and strength? When do you think you should start doing this?]
I think it\'s the only exercise.
I am still young, but I also feel that my body condition is worse every year.
Before this year, I can work overnight.
However, nowadays I can not work after midnight because it\'s too tired.
I heard from seniors that they work out to live.
If they don\'t exercise they can not do anything.
I can understand it a little.
And I think taking nutrients also very important.
When I took vitamin and some nutrients, I felt a new feeling in the morning.
I think maybe it caused by unbalanced foods for modern people.
People are busy so they take fast food or just skip the meal.
It makes our body unhealthy.
Lastly, I think the most important thing is improving the mind.
Those who think they are getting old are old, and those who think they are still young are young and do everything.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]! Thank you for sending your homework early. I appreciate the effort! ^^
Well thought of answer. I like it! You really have improved with your writing. Well done! ^ ^
I agree with you. Exercising, having a healthy lifestyle and a good mental state are the key factors for a happy healthy life. And I guess we need to start as early as now! ^ ^
-Teacher Jedah
>>I think the best way is to exercise.
I am still young, but I also feel that my body condition is worse every year.
I am still young, but I also feel that my body condition is worse every year.
>>I am still young, but I also feel that my body condition is getting worse every year.
Before this year, I can work overnight.
Before this year, I can work overnight.
>>Before this year, I can sill do some exercises at night.
However, nowadays I can not work after midnight because it\'s too tired.
However, nowadays I can not work after midnight because it\'s too tired.
>>However, nowadays I can not work out after midnight because it\'s too tiring( I feel too tired).
I heard from seniors that they work out to live.
I heard from seniors that they work out to live.
>>CORRECT
If they don\'t exercise they can not do anything.
If they don\'t exercise they can not do anything.
>>CORRECT
I can understand it a little.
I can understand it a little.
>>CORRECT
And I think taking nutrients also very important.
And I think taking nutrients also very important.
>>And I think taking nutrients is also very important.
When I took vitamin and some nutrients, I felt a new feeling in the morning.
When I took vitamin and some nutrients, I felt a new feeling in the morning.
>>When I take vitamins and some supplements, I feel differently in the morning.
I think maybe it caused by unbalanced foods for modern people.
I think maybe it caused by unbalanced foods for modern people.
>>I think maybe it is due to unhealthy and unbalanced food people take these days.
People are busy so they take fast food or just skip the meal.
People are busy so they take fast food or just skip the meal.
>>People are busy so they take fast food or just skip meals.
It makes our body unhealthy.
It makes our body unhealthy.
>>CORRECT
Lastly, I think the most important thing is improving the mind.
Lastly, I think the most important thing is improving the mind.
>>CORRECT
Those who think they are getting old are old, and those who think they are still young are young and do everything.
Those who think they are getting old are old, and those who think they are still young are young and do everything.
>>CORRECT
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