10/22 homework

2010-10-22 · 첨삭 강사 Ivyy

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1. It is difficult to say that this behavior is right or wrong. But I think, if someone tell me the reason of being late is what to help an elderly, I wouldn’t believe someone. Because even if they had a good purpose for other people, company can’t accommodate them. If I face same situation, I’ll ask other people to help an elderly. 2. It’s very worth studying for succeeding in the future. Because we live in competitive society, we must have competitiveness to survive. And to be a top on our field, we have to study our major or second language. If we don’t study anything, we would behind compared to other person who do their best.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름]!

You have a point in what you were saying with those two issues. Thanks for sharing your thoughts and opinions! Here are the corrections I have made. I hope you read and analyze them J

HAVE A GREAT WEEKEND!

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-Verna-

1. It is difficult to say that this behavior is right or wrong.

>> It is difficult to say if this behavior is right or wrong.
But I think, if someone tell me the reason of being late is what to help an elderly, I wouldn't believe someone.

>> But I think if someone tells me the reason for them being late is that they helped an elderly, I wouldn't believe him/her.
Because even if they had a good purpose for other people, company can’t accommodate them.
>> Because even if they had a good purpose for other people, the company can't accommodate them.

If I face same situation, I'll ask other people to help an elderly.

>> If I face the same situation, I'll ask other people to help the elderly.
2. It's very worth studying for succeeding in the future.

>> It's really worth studying to succeed in the future.

Because we live in competitive society, we must have competitiveness to survive.

>> Because we live in a competitive society, we must have competitiveness to survive.
And to be a top on our field, we have to study our major or second language.

>> And to be on top of our field, we have to study our major/degree/course, or a second language.
If we don’t study anything, we would behind compared to other person who do their best.

>> If we don't study anything, we would be behind compared to other people who do their best.

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