10. 22. Homework

2018-10-23 · 첨삭 강사 Blair

학생이 쓴 원문

Answer the question in not less than 5 sentences. Give relevant examples. - Do you agree that teenagers have a higher tendency to commit suicide than adults? Why or why not? I don't think so. I think the age isn't important in depression. I think teenagers and adults who don't get love from themselves both can feel that they don't want to live. I sometimes feel that life is tough but, I don't want to die because there're not only sorrow but also joy in our life. I wait the joy and when I feel the joy, I enjoy.

강사 첨삭

I don\'t think so. I think the age isn\'t important in depression. I think teenagers and adults who don\'t get love from themselves both can feel that they don\'t want to live. I sometimes feel that life is tough but, I don\'t want to die because there\'re not only sorrow but also joy in our life. I wait the joy and when I feel the joy, I enjoy.

I don\'t think so. I think the age isn\'t important in depression. I think teenagers and adults who don\'t get love from themselves both can feel that they don\'t want to live. I sometimes feel that life is tough but, I don\'t want to die because there\'re not only sorrows in life but also joy. I wait for the good things to happen in my life and I feel the joy and happiness it gives me.

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