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I think that keeping traditions is important. Our country have various kinks of traditions such as Chuseok, Seollal and Daeboreum. It is called family holiday. It means that family almost gather family holiday in their hometown especially that day. These days, all family members lived in other city to make living without lived in their parents together. So that, they doesn’t quite often meet up together. Then, it is very important for us. When we meet up together, we are cooking some food together such as rice soup, fried sweet potato, fried fish and steamed pork. And we are catching up late at night. After that, we have a meal together that cooked food. Also, we are visiting ancestors tomb to memory. That being said, our traditions is very important like that reasons. We have duty to keep protect to our traditions now and forever. Thank you for reading my story. That’s it.
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Good morning Mr. [이름]^^
I hope you had a great weekend.
Here\'s the correction for today. I like traditions, too :)
I think that keeping traditions is important.
>>> CORRECT!
OR: I think it\'s important to keep tradition.
Our country have various kinks of traditions such as Chuseok, Seollal and Daeboreum.
>>> Our country have various kinds of traditions such as Chuseok, Seollal and Daeboreum.
It is called family holiday.
>>> It is called a family holiday.
It means that family almost gather family holiday in their hometown especially that day.
>>> It means that family members gathered almost together in their hometown.
These days, all family members lived in other city to make living without lived in their parents together.
>>> These days all family members live in another city to make a living without their parents.
So that, they doesn’t quite often meet up together.
>>> So, they don\'t often meet together.
Then, it is very important for us.
>>> CORRECT!
When we meet up together, we are cooking some food together such as rice soup, fried sweet potato, fried fish and steamed pork.
>>> When we meet together, we cook some food like rice soup, fried sweet potato, fried fish and steamed pork.
And we are catching up late at night.
>>> And we catch up with each other until late at night.
After that, we have a meal together that cooked food.
>>> After that, we enjoy the meal together.
Also, we are visiting ancestors tomb to memory.
>>> We also visit our ancestors tomb.
That being said, our traditions is very important like that reasons.
>>> So to speak, our tradition is very important for that reason.
We have duty to keep protect to our traditions now and forever.
>>> We have a duty to keep and protect to our traditions now and forever.
Thank you for reading my story. That’s it.
>>> CORRECT!
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