10/23 homework
학생이 쓴 원문
I am on a young people\'s side now.
I think young people suffer more discrimination in Korean society.
The number of babies is decreasing more and more, it means the portion of old people is increasing.
Korea is going to an aging society and the economy of Korea is also getting worse.
In my parents\' period, getting a job is relatively easier than now.
Many young people are trying to get a job but the rate of employment is very low nowadays.
Many young people are just an applicant after graduating from university.
So, the government officer is the most popular job among young people because it doesn\'t have any anxiety for fire.
Even when we get a subway, many young people can not take a sit due to many elders.
Although there are elders\' seats, it is not enough.
Some of the old people say young people want to jet only high-quality jobs and lazy nowadays.
However, I can exactly say they don\'t know about modern society and they have to understand this era.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]! Thank you so much for accomplishing and sending your homework in time. I appreciate it! ^^
I understand where you\'re coming from especially that your country has low birth rate and elderly people are growing in number. But in my country, it\'s the other way around; especially in the workplace. Aging in the Philippines is getting to be more difficult as the years progress. Not only is it difficult to survive in a low economic country, but survival becomes almost impossible for aging Filipinos; when work is no longer accessible over a certain age. Age discrimination in the Philippines has become such a pressing issue that not only affects the countries work force but most importantly, the personal and emotional well being of the elderly.
-Teacher Jedah
>>I am on the young people\'s side now.
I think young people suffer more discrimination in Korean society.
I think young people suffer more discrimination in Korean society.
>>CORRECT
The number of babies is decreasing more and more, it means the portion of old people is increasing.
The number of babies is decreasing more and more, it means the portion of old people is increasing.
>>The number of babies is decreasing more and more, which means the number of old people is increasing.
Korea is going to an aging society and the economy of Korea is also getting worse.
Korea is going to an aging society and the economy of Korea is also getting worse.
>>Korea has an aging society and the economy is also getting worse.
In my parents\' period, getting a job is relatively easier than now.
In my parents\' period, getting a job is relatively easier than now.
>>CORRECT
Many young people are trying to get a job but the rate of employment is very low nowadays.
Many young people are trying to get a job but the rate of employment is very low nowadays.
>>CORRECT
Many young people are just an applicant after graduating from university.
Many young people are just an applicant after graduating from university.
>>CORRECT
So, the government officer is the most popular job among young people because it doesn\'t have any anxiety for fire.
So, the government officer is the most popular job among young people because it doesn\'t have any anxiety for fire.
>>So, being a government employee is the most popular job among young people because they worry less about getting fired.
Even when we get a subway, many young people can not take a sit due to many elders.
Even when we get a subway, many young people can not take a sit due to many elders.
>>Even in the subway, many young people can not take a sit due to many elders.
Although there are elders\' seats, it is not enough.
Although there are elders\' seats, it is not enough.
>>CORRECT
Some of the old people say young people want to jet only high-quality jobs and lazy nowadays.
Some of the old people say young people want to jet only high-quality jobs and lazy nowadays.
>>Some of the old people say young people want to get only high-quality/high paying jobs and are lazy nowadays.
However, I can exactly say they don\'t know about modern society and they have to understand this era.
However, I can exactly say they don\'t know about modern society and they have to understand this era.
>>CORRECT
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