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2018-10-24 · 첨삭 강사 Jean

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>>Do you think legalizing marijuana as a recreational drug would lead to an increase in crime? Many studies have shown that marijuana is innocuous. It means, crime rate isn't up to marijuana but a user. And the effect of marijuana is known to be similar with alcohol. We are already living in a world where alcohol is legal. However what are we witnessing? We are only seeing just an ordinary world but not hell.

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Jean

Do you think legalizing marijuana as a recreational drug would lead to an increase in crime?

Many studies have shown that marijuana is innocuous.
It means, crime rate isn\'t up to marijuana but a user.
>> correct
>> or: Studies have shown that marijuana is harmless and not addictive which means that the increase in crime rate is not a direct result of smoking marijuana.

And the effect of marijuana is known to be similar with alcohol.
>> Also, the same studies have proven that marijuana and alcohol have a similar effect on the body.

We are already living in a world where alcohol is legal.
However what are we witnessing?
We are only seeing just an ordinary world but not hell.
>> We are already living in a world where alcohol is legal and we can clearly see that everything is merely ordinary. We are not suffering from the expected ill effects of this controversial drug.

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