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2010-10-27 · 첨삭 강사 Verna

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Do you think that there is anything worth dying for? It is worth dying for drinking coffee for me. I drink coffee 3 cups everyday on a average. When I’m in my office, there is always a mug cup in front of my desk top. And when I meet my friends I always go coffee shops after dinner. I know the caffeine is not good for our health. But I feel that my stress disappear when I drink coffee. The price of coffee at franchise such as star bugs is more expensive than junk food. But I can remove my stress when I smell the aroma of coffee. If coffee disappear in the world, I wouldn’t work in my company any more.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름],
 You have to take it in moderation.Remember,Everything that is too much is bad...Have a great day!

Do you think that there is anything worth dying for?

>>Correct
It is worth dying for drinking coffee for me.

>>Drinking coffee for me is worth dying for.

I drink coffee 3 cups everyday on a average.

>>I drink 3 cups of cofee everyday on average.

When I’m in my office, there is always a mug cup in front of my desk top.

>> When I뭢 in my office, there always a mug/cup in front of my desk top.

And when I meet my friends I always go coffee shops after dinner.

>> And when I meet my friends I always go to coffee shop after dinner.

I know the caffeine is not good for our health.

>>Correct

But I feel that my stress disappear when I drink coffee.

>>Correct
The price of coffee at franchise such as star bugs is more expensive than junk food.

>> The price of coffee at franchise such as star bucks is more expensive than junk food.

But I can remove my stress when I smell the aroma of coffee.

>>Correct

>> But I can release my stress whenever I smell the aroma of coffee.Better

If coffee disappear in the world, I wouldn뭪 work in my company any more.

>> If coffee disappear in the world, I couldn뭪 work in my company any more.

 

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