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2020-10-29 · 첨삭 강사 Fiona

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I really like to go traveling wherever I go. Firstly, I want to go trip alone like that backpacking. I think travel is way to looking for myself. So that, I’d like to go trip alone so much. In the past, I went backpacking tour alone at somewhere. There were Australia, NewZealand and Thailand for 8 month. I first went to NewZealand and I was traveling here and there over the nationwide in NewZealand. I had many time to talk with me while traveling alone. Then, I concerned a lot that what I will do for my future. I think it was very good time for me. I also met to various country people while I went trip. At that time, I couldn’t communication well with them because I didn’t have ability to speak English with them. I think now it was so sad experience that I couldn’t speak English. Anyway, I dislike to go traveling with someone especially in case of backpacking. I really want to go trip alone and enjoy to traveling only. If I have a chance like that, I will go trip alone at somewhere.

강사 첨삭

Good evening Mr. [이름]! 
Well, it\'s true that it was a sad experience because you weren\'t able to interact with them. I feel you! 
That\'s why I\'m motivated to learn more greetings in different languages, so at least I could greet them nicely :) 
Good night and thank you for your effort! 

I really like to go traveling wherever I go.
>>>I really like to traveling wherever I go.
Firstly, I want to go trip alone like that backpacking. 
>>>First, I want to travel alone like that of a backpacking trip.
I think travel is way to looking for myself. 
>>>I think traveling is the way to find myself.
So that, I’d like to go trip alone so much.
>>>So I want to travel alone.
In the past, I went backpacking tour alone at somewhere. 
>>>In the past, I went on a backpacking tour alone somewhere. 
There were Australia, NewZealand and Thailand for 8 month. 
>>>I spent 8 months visiting Australia, New Zealand and Thailand. 
I first went to NewZealand and I was traveling here and there over the nationwide in NewZealand. 
>>>I went to New Zealand for the first time, and I was traveling all over the country. 
I had many time to talk with me while traveling alone. 
>>>(Sorry, but I don\'t understand what you mean here.)
Then, I concerned a lot that what I will do for my future. 
>>>Then, I was very worried about what I would do for my future.
I think it was very good time for me. 
>>>I think it was a very good time for me. 
I also met to various country people while I went trip. 
>>>I met people from many countries during my trip. 
At that time, I couldn’t communication well with them because I didn’t have ability to speak English with them. 
>>>At that time, I couldn\'t communicate well because I couldn\'t communicate with them in English.
I think now it was so sad experience that I couldn’t speak English. 
>>>I think it was such a sad experience that I couldn\'t speak English now.
Anyway, I dislike to go traveling with someone especially in case of backpacking. 
>>>Anyway, I dislike to go traveling with someone especially backpacking.
I really want to go trip alone and enjoy to traveling only. 
>>>I really want to go on a trip alone and just enjoy the trip.
If I have a chance like that, I will go trip alone at somewhere.
>>>If I get the chance, I\'ll go on a trip by myself.

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