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학생이 쓴 원문
I have lived in Seoul since I was born.
I like Seoul very much and I want to stay for good in Seoul.
Actually, I enjoy traveling around the world.
It\'s so exciting to learn about other cultures and share local food.
However, when staying in other country for several days, I miss Seoul life, Korean food, and Korean environement.
Sometimes, experiencing new cultures give me inspiration, but familiarity is the best thing to give me comfort and cozy.
My family and friends live in Seoul, so I\'m not lonely in Seoul.
Because I\'m accustomed to Seoul\'s direction, I could find anything and enjoy many things.
Since I\'m good at Korean, I have no problem in communicating with other people and easily get help from other people.
For these reasons, I\'m planning to live in Seoul after I retire.
강사 첨삭
Hello, Dr. [이름]!
Seoul is the place to be! It seems like everything that you are looking for a place to stay are already available in your city. Then, be it Seoul.
Your composition has so many supporting details to explain your choice. Apparently, you can go on and on with your list. Also, your comparison of travel to anothe country makes your answer even well established that there is no place like your home, Seoul.
Thus, try to go over the grammar suggestions on a few of your sentences and study them carefully. Thank you for your consistent hard work and effort in writing! You are gettn better each time. Way to go!
-T. Donna~
I have lived in Seoul since I was born.
>> Correct!
I like Seoul very much and I want to stay for good in Seoul.
>> Correct!
Actually, I enjoy traveling around the world.
>> Correct!
It\'s so exciting to learn about other cultures and share local food.
>> Correct!
However, when staying in other country for several days, I miss Seoul life, Korean food, and Korean environement.
>> However, when staying in another country for several days, I miss Seoul life; Korean food and the Korean environement.
Sometimes, experiencing new cultures give me inspiration, but familiarity is the best thing to give me comfort and cozy.
>> Sometimes, experiencing new cultures give me inspiration, but familiarity is the best thing to give me comfort and coziness.
My family and friends live in Seoul, so I\'m not lonely in Seoul.
>> Correct!
Because I\'m accustomed to Seoul\'s direction, I could find anything and enjoy many things.
>> Correct!
Since I\'m good at Korean, I have no problem in communicating with other people and easily get help from other people.
>> Correct!
Or: Since I\'m good at Korean, I have no problem in communicating with other people and I could easily get help from other people.
For these reasons, I\'m planning to live in Seoul after I retire.
>> Correct!
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