10.30 Homework

2014-10-30 · 첨삭 강사 Kelly

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Hi Kelly! Good morning! It's a fantastic the day before weekend again. Have a nice day. What do you think will be the world's greatest problem in 20 years time? I think that the world's greatest problem in 20 years time can be devided three main issues. To sum up, the one is jobs crunch. Robots will take most of our works instead of us.Another is an aging society.there might be occured conflict of generation about social responsibility extremely.The other is global warming. We might have suffered from some natural disasters. That's why human beings pursuit convenience endlessly.I think that things are always fair. Thank you! Byebye!

강사 첨삭

Hello Mr. [이름]! Happy Thursday! I\'m glad that you are having a fine day. Are you already excited for the weekend? Anyway, please go over my corrections. Have a nice day!~Kelly^^ Hi Kelly! Good morning! >> Correct. It\'s a fantastic the day before weekend again. >> It\'s a fantastic day before the weekend again. Have a nice day. >> Correct.What do you think will be the world\'s greatest problem in 20 years time?I think that the world\'s greatest problem in 20 years time can be devided three main issues. >> Correct. To sum up, the one is jobs crunch. >> The first one is crunch jobs. Robots will take most of our works instead of us. >> Robots will do most of our work instead of us. Another is an aging society. >> Another problem is aging society. there might be occured conflict of generation about social responsibility extremely. >> There would be problems/conflicts about social responsibility among the next generation. The other is global warming. >> Correct. We might have suffered from some natural disasters. >> We might suffer from natural disasters. That\'s why human beings pursuit convenience endlessly. >> That\'s why human beings pursue convenience endlessly. I think that things are always fair. >> Correct.Thank you! Byebye! >> Correct.

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