10/31 homework
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]! Thank you for doing your homework! ^ ^
You have a very brilliant mind and a vivid imagination! A world with no rules would be chaotic! As you have described it; \"a big boxing ring where everybody is fighting just to get what they want\". Rules are very important. They provide a stable environment and human co existence. ^ ^
-Teacher Jedah
I think people will not go for work in the world of adult.
>>I think for adult people, they will no longer go to work.
And they want to go to shopping center.
>>And they would rather go to shopping centers.
They try many cloths, bag, and shoes etc.
>>They would try many clothes, bags, shoes and many more.
And people have a lunch freely.
>>And people would eat anywhere for free.
But, maybe many people fight each other because they want to do whatever they wanted.
>>But, a lot of people would probably fight each other, because everybody would do what they want.
Suddenly, the world will change to like a boxing stadium.
>>Then suddenly, the world would change and would look like a big boxing ring.
Finally, everyone will think the rules is very important to live all peacefully.
>> Finally, everyone would come to their senses and realize that rules are very important to live peacefully.
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