10/31 homework

2018-10-31 · 첨삭 강사 Jedah

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[Pretend you woke up one day and there were no rules. People could suddenly do whatever they wanted! Explain what the world would be like. Use your imagination!] I think people will not go for work in the world of adult. And they want to go to shopping center. They try many cloths, bag, and shoes etc. And people have a lunch freely. But, maybe many people fight each other because they want to do whatever they wanted. Suddenly, the world will change to like a boxing stadium. Finally, everyone will think the rules is very important to live all peacefully.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]! Thank you for doing your homework! ^ ^

You have a very brilliant mind and a vivid imagination! A world with no rules would be chaotic! As you have described it; \"a big boxing ring where everybody is fighting just to get what they want\". Rules are very important. They provide a stable environment and human co existence. ^ ^

-Teacher Jedah


I think people will not go for work in the world of adult.

>>I think for adult people, they will no longer go to work.
And they want to go to shopping center.

>>And they would rather go to shopping centers.
They try many cloths, bag, and shoes etc.

>>They would try many clothes, bags, shoes and many more. 
And people have a lunch freely.

>>And people would eat anywhere for free.
But, maybe many people fight each other because they want to do whatever they wanted.

>>But, a lot of people would probably fight each other, because everybody would do what they want.
Suddenly, the world will change to like a boxing stadium.

>>Then suddenly, the world would change and would look like a big boxing ring.
Finally, everyone will think the rules is very important to live all peacefully.

>> Finally, everyone would come to their senses and realize that rules are very important to live peacefully.

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