10/4 homework
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Hi [이름]! Thank you on your thoughts with this one and I agree with you. We borrow Earth from our children. This advice prods us to consider the future, and not to focus on the present or on the past. Instead of living just for today and gratifying our own immediate needs, we should think about how our current actions will affect the planet in the future generations who will live on it. ^ ^
-Teacher Jedah
>>I strongly agree with this sentence.
We are destroying the Earth for our convenience everyday.
>>Correct
The amount of waste is increasing every year.
>>Correct
Moreover, nowadays the natural disaster becoming serious.
>>Moreover, nowadays, natural disasters are becoming serious.
I don\'t know how long we can stay in the Earth.
>>I don\'t know how long will we live on Earth.
Sometimes, I am afraid about that.
>>Correct
Some strong countries are finding new Earth in the space.
>>Correct or
>> Some well developed and affluent countries are finding a new planet in space similar to Earth.
Even if they will find new Earth or second Earth, I can not make sure I can go or not, because it will highly cost.
>>Even if they will find a \"new Earth\" or a planet similar to Earth, I am not sure whether I can go or not because it will be costly.
We have to preserve our environment clearly from right now.
>>Clearly, we have to preserve our environment right now.
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