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2018-10-05 · 첨삭 강사 Jedah

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[What is your opinion about women in the military?] This is an unsolved argument in Korea. I agree about the equal service for military between women and men. But, I think we can find different way. For example, the government impose a tax to women for military service. Many women disagree about this. But, I have a younger brother, husband, and father. So, I can understand their situation. Anyone want to go for military service. I know some countries give the equal duty to women and men. In Korean, even if suddenly women have to go to army, if will make big panic. I think we can find suitable way to both of women and men.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]! Thank you for doing your homework. Another well thought and an interesting input indeed! We all have different views about women entering the military, but at the end of the day, it\'s what you do for your country that matters, whether in the military or not. ^ ^

-Teacher Jedah


This is an unsolved argument in Korea.

>>Correct 
I agree about the equal service for military between women and men.

>>Correct
But, I think we can find different way.

>>But I think, we can find another way.
For example, the government impose a tax to women for military service.

>>For example, the government imposes a tax to women for the military service. 
Many women disagree about this.

>>Correct
But, I have a younger brother, husband, and father.

>>Correct 
So, I can understand their situation.

>>Correct 
Anyone want to go for military service.

>>Everyone wants to be in the military service. 
I know some countries give the equal duty to women and men.

>>I know some countries give equal duties to women and men. 
In Korean, even if suddenly women have to go to army, if will make big panic.

>>In Korea, if women would suddenly be asked to serve in the military, it will raise a great concern.   
I think we can find suitable way to both of women and men.

>>I think we can find a suitable way for both women and men.

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