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Hi there Ms. [이름]!
Thank you for sharing your opinion about the military service. Actually, I heard many young people don\'t like it and think it\'s unfair. But I guess your government also has a valid reason for making it compulsory service. See you tomorrow! Have a good day!
Take care!
~T. Lynn
Helping for someoe is very a good way to volunteer.
>> Helping someone is a very good way to volunteer.
However it can\'t be compulsory sevice.
>> However, it shouldn\'t be compulsory service.
Even if you don\'t request to force, many people will volunteer military.
>> Even if you don\'t ask by force, many people will volunteer for the military.
I believe it.
>> I believe that.
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