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2015-10-14 · 첨삭 강사 Erine

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In the high school's class room, you can see students who is studying. They abandoned something they want to do, something joyful,exciting, like playing a game or playing outside until late night. And also you can see some students laugh, enjoying thier present time, not preparing their future. Students who have prepared their future very hard can be what they want to be, and can do what they want to do. In contrast , students who have not prepared their future and just enjoyed pesent can not be what they want to be . I don't mean that it should be studying. It shoud be soccer, playning video game, and singing a song. For their future they have to do something very hard , though they abandonded something. It can be an example of "He laughs best who laughs last". And also at the world cup, the team losing now can win at the last, when the final whistle is blowed. So we shouldn't give up until the last. It means also "He laughs best who laughs last"

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Good morning, [이름]! Sorry if I checked your homework late. Please review the corrections I made for you. If you have questions, feel free to ask in class. Take care! ~~Teacher Erine~~ In the high school\'s class room, you can see students who is studying. They abandoned something they want to do, something joyful,exciting, like playing a game or playing outside until late night. >> In a high school\'s class room, you can see students who are studying. They abandoned something they want to do; something joyful and exciting like playing a game or outside until late at night. And also you can see some students laugh, enjoying thier present time, not preparing their future. >> And you can also see some students laughing, enjoying their present time and not preparing for their future.Students who have prepared their future very hard can be what they want to be, and can do what they want to do.>> Students who have prepared for their future very hard can be what they want to be and can do what they want to do.In contrast , students who have not prepared their future and just enjoyed pesent can not be what they want to be .>> In contrast, students who have not prepared for their future and just enjoyed the pesent can not be what they want to be .I don\'t mean that it should be studying. It shoud be soccer, playning video game, and singing a song. For their future they have to do something very hard , though they abandonded something. >> I don\'t mean that they should only study nor play soccer, video games or sing a song. For their future, they have to do something very hard even though they abandon something.It can be an example of \"He laughs best who laughs last\".>> CorrectAnd also at the world cup, the team losing now can win at the last, when the final whistle is blowed. So we shouldn\'t give up until the last. It means also \"He laughs best who laughs last\" >> In addition, at the world cup, the team losing now can win at the last, when the final whistle is blowed. So we shouldn\'t give up until the last part. It also means \"He laughs best who laughs last\"

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