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[Should education be free?]
I don\'t think so.
Surely the government has to give the chance everyone as welfare for minimum or basic education.
But, I think private education can not remove forever.
I think that both quantity and quality are very important.
In a capitalist society, education is also one of the industries.
There are a few famous teachers in Korea.
We call them \'star teacher\'.
Their salary is very high and always their class is very crowded with many students.
The teachers work and study hard to give a better lecture for their rank and salary.
They might have a sense of duty and respect, but money also very important.
Moreover, the range of education is very wide.
The government can not cover all of them.
So, often we should find private education.
But, sometimes I think we should limit the range of private education.
Especially in Korea, the portion of the money spent on private education is too high.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]! Thanks for your thoughts on this one. I appreciate it a lot! ^^
You made a good point here, but coming from a third world country, I would have to say that education should be free and accessible to everyone. An educated citizen is a more productive citizen. ^ ^
-Teacher Jedah
>>CORRECT
Surely the government has to give the chance everyone as welfare for minimum or basic education.
Surely the government has to give the chance everyone as welfare for minimum or basic education.
>>Surely the government has to give the chance to everyone as welfare to minimum or basic education.
But, I think private education can not remove forever.
>>But, I think private education can not be removed forever.
>>But, I think private education can not be removed forever.
I think that both quantity and quality are very important.
>>CORRECT
In a capitalist society, education is also one of the industries.
In a capitalist society, education is also one of the industries.
>>CORRECT
There are a few famous teachers in Korea.
There are a few famous teachers in Korea.
>>CORRECT
We call them \'star teacher\'.
We call them \'star teacher\'.
>>We call them \"star teachers\".
Their salary is very high and always their class is very crowded with many students.
Their salary is very high and always their class is very crowded with many students.
>>CORRECT OR
>>They are paid high and their classes are always packed full with students.
The teachers work and study hard to give a better lecture for their rank and salary.
The teachers work and study hard to give a better lecture for their rank and salary.
>>CORRECT
They might have a sense of duty and respect, but money also very important.
They might have a sense of duty and respect, but money also very important.
>>They might have a sense of duty and respect, but for them, money is also very important.
Moreover, the range of education is very wide.
Moreover, the range of education is very wide.
>>CORRECT
The government can not cover all of them.
The government can not cover all of them.
>>CORRECT
So, often we should find private education.
So, often we should find private education.
>>CORRECT
But, sometimes I think we should limit the range of private education.
But, sometimes I think we should limit the range of private education.
>>CORRECT
Especially in Korea, the portion of the money spent on private education is too high.
Especially in Korea, the portion of the money spent on private education is too high.
>>CORRECT
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