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2021-10-19 · 첨삭 강사 Ivy

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Through this experience, it was found that the impact of the international agreements on domestic law’s changing, and alternations in international investment and domestic law are indispensable to achieve the climate change mitigation targets. This situation suggests that the question of how can countries protect foreign investors and their investment under International Investment Agreements (IIAs) and enforce domestic climate regimes. In addition, I would like to conduct a study that allows to development of integrated standard-setting to interpret ambiguously and fluctuate concepts (Fair and Equitable treatment, for instance) under IIAs to incorporate climate change concerns in ISDs. --> In this sentence, I don\'t want to use \"I would like to~\" , because I believe using \"I\" isn\'t a formal writing. Could you teach me how can I write this sentence in other way?

강사 첨삭

Well done Ye [이름]! Great work on this. - Teacher Ivy
Through this experience, it was found that the impact of the international agreements on domestic law’s changing, and alternations in international investment and domestic law are indispensable to achieve the climate change mitigation targets.
>> Correct
This situation suggests that the question of how can countries protect foreign investors and their investment under International Investment Agreements (IIAs) and enforce domestic climate regimes.
>> Correct
In addition, I would like to conduct a study that allows to development of integrated standard-setting to interpret ambiguously and fluctuate concepts (Fair and Equitable treatment, for instance) under IIAs to incorporate climate change concerns in ISDs.
>> In addition, another study would be conducted to allow development of integrated standard-setting to interpret ambiguously and fluctuate concepts (Fair and Equitable treatment, for instance) under IIAs to incorporate climate change concerns in ISDs.

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