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2018-10-23 · 첨삭 강사 Jedah

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My favorite fictional character is Elsa of a webtoon "Ugly Hood". She has amazing psychokinesis. She is a common highschool student but she becomes a hero after she drank a suspicous beverage. Immidate after, she saw an alien who wants to kill her. She was surprised but her willpower was more powerful than alien's power. So she won the fight. Sometimes she looks stupid but it is a strategy for hiding her identity. I think it's cool! I'd like to explain why she is called ugly ood. She always wears a hood. She's not ugly but aliens think that she interups their plans so they hate her. That's the reason why her nickname is ugly hood. Last story of that webtoon, her father was kidnapped by aliens' boss. I'm looking forward to next story! Maybe she'll save her father wonderfully. PS. Marvelous Monday to you Jedah! Isn't it rude? In Korea, we can't tell the name of teacher. I'm always wondering that but also I always forget it. And on your feedback, you told me Nicole! What's wrong with you?

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]! Thank you for devoting your time in doing your homework. I appreciate it a lot! And I always laugh at your post scripts! ^ ^

I\'m sorry for calling you Nicole, I must have mistyped it. ^ ^

Calling someone by their first name isn\'t rude if they are your friends and if you have the same ages or the person you are referring to is younger. It is always nice to say Teacher Jedah as a sign of respect. In my country we either call our teachers in their first names like Teacher [이름], Ms. [이름] or Ma\'am [이름]. ^ ^ Or with their surnames like: Mrs. [Name], Ma\'am Martinez or Teacher Martinez. ^ ^

Your choice of fictional character sounds really interesting. You gave a very good and clear description of her! I know of a Robin Hood but this character is quite new to me. You said from the \"webtoon\"; is this a character from a computer game? I wonder.. ^ ^

-Teacher Jedah 



My favorite fictional character is Elsa of a webtoon \"Ugly Hood\".

>>My favorite fictional character is Elsa of a webtoon entitled \"Ugly Hood\".

She has amazing psychokinesis.

>>Correct

She is a common highschool student but she becomes a hero after she drank a suspicous beverage.

>>Correct

Immidate after, she saw an alien who wants to kill her.

>>Immediately after, she saw an alien who wants to kill her.

She was surprised but her willpower was more powerful than alien\'s power.

>>She was surprised but her willpower was more powerful than the alien\'s power.

So she won the fight.

>>Correct

Sometimes she looks stupid but it is a strategy for hiding her identity.

>>Correct

I think it\'s cool!

>>Correct 

I\'d like to explain why she is called ugly ood.

>>I\'d like to explain why she is called ugly hood. (typo error with \"hood\") 

She always wears a hood.

>>Correct

She\'s not ugly but aliens think that she interups their plans so they hate her.

>>She\'s not ugly but aliens think that she interrupts their plans so they hate her. (misspelled \"interrupts)

That\'s the reason why her nickname is ugly hood.

>>Correct

Last story of that webtoon, her father was kidnapped by aliens\' boss.

>>Last story of that webtoon, her father was kidnapped by the aliens\' boss.

I\'m looking forward to next story!

>>I\'m looking forward to the next story.

Maybe she\'ll save her father wonderfully.

>>Correct

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