105. Homework

2018-04-23 · 첨삭 강사 Rose

학생이 쓴 원문

ESSAY: "Not all learning takes place in the classroom." Do you agree or disagree? I agree with the sentence ‘not all learning takes place in the classroom’ because I have already known there are plenty of things and situations that we are able to learn out of classroom. Students are able to learn in the class such as how to make friends, how to handle or solve the problems, how to calculate numbers using plus, minus, multiply, division and calculus and then they learn about history, science, manner, etiquette, sex education, humanities, languages and etc. However, they might not learn how to solve the problem when they meet accidents in the society like how to handle a car accident, how to prevent before typhoon comes, how to survive when they lost in the forest and something like that. Moreover, even if we, who already graduated and joined a company, have learned subject about each major, most people have to study again at the company. Since most studies match good for learning basic skills at work, it isn’t suitable for a work owing to a lot of variable parameters. Thus, most freshmen will be trained by the company’s manual, and coworkers who were engaged ahead. That’s why I am saying that students will not be learned all knowledge in the classroom.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름]! Thank you so much for doing your homework. I had fun reading your thoughts about this topic. I must say that you did a great job in expressing your ideas this time. I just changed some words to make your sentences more coherent. Nonetheless, you did great! Nice work! ^^ I agree with the sentence ‘not all learning takes place in the classroom’ because I have already known there are plenty of things and situations that we are able to learn out of classroom. >> I agree with the sentence \'not all learning takes place in the classroom’ because I know that there are still plenty of things and situations we can learn outside the classroom.Students are able to learn in the class such as how to make friends, how to handle or solve the problems, how to calculate numbers using plus, minus, multiply, division and calculus and then they learn about history, science, manner, etiquette, sex education, humanities, languages and etc. >> Inside the classroom, students learn how to make friends and how to solve Mathematical problems. They also learn about History, Science, Humanities, Language, and many more.However, they might not learn how to solve the problem when they meet accidents in the society like how to handle a car accident, how to prevent before typhoon comes, how to survive when they lost in the forest and something like that. >> However, they might not learn how to solve problems in case they experience accidents, typhoons, or how they could survive when they get lost in a forest. Moreover, even if we, who already graduated and joined a company, have learned subject about each major, most people have to study again at the company. >> Even us, who already graduated still have to undergo trainings and study again when we want to join a company. Since most studies match good for learning basic skills at work, it isn’t suitable for a work owing to a lot of variable parameters. >> Most lessons we learn in school are useful for basic skills at work but there are still some rules we need to learn. Thus, most freshmen will be trained by the company’s manual, and coworkers who were engaged ahead. >> Most freshmen will be trained according to the company\'s manual with the help of employees who were hired first. That’s why I am saying that students will not be learned all knowledge in the classroom. >> That is why I think that students will not learn everything inside the classroom.

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