107. Homework
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Thank you very much for doing your homework, Jason^^
Don\'t let your busy life take a toll on your health and relationships.
Find balance in everything you do, even though it is very challenging~
Have a great day!
ESSAY: Many people strive to maintain a successful career and happy family life at the same time. How can we balance our time in a very demanding society?
>>CORRECT!
Before I was hired from this company, I used to search the internet gathering information for preparing an interview.
>>Before I was hired from this company, I used to search the internet gathering information to prepare for an interview.
At that time, I saw similar question as you asked.
>> At that time, I saw a question similar to what you asked.
Some person reported on community cafe about his answer during his interview belongs big company.
>>On an online community, some person reported his answer during his interview at a big company.
An interviewer asked a question to the interviewee that if your boss asked that you needed to work during your vacation even if you submitted your plan.
>>An interviewer asked a question to the interviewee that, \"If your boss asked that you needed to work during your vacation even if you submitted your plan, what would you do?
And the plan is that he had already promised with his family for a traveling and it’s quite important to him.
>>And the plan is that he had already promised with his family to travel, and it’s quite important to him.
At that time, what would you choose between going to work and going to vacation?
>> At that time, what would you choose between going to work and going on vacation?
He answered that he would choose a work since he thought project and his career was important to him.
>> He answered that he would choose work since he thought project and his career were important to him.
However, if I were him, I would like to ask a favor to my boss because family also were important to me.
>>However, if I were him, I would like to ask a favor to my boss because family was also important to me.
If he didn’t allow me to get time for a journey, I would work for the company although I feel bad because I don\'t have any other choice.
>> If he didn’t allow me to get time for a journey, I would work for the company although I feel bad because I didn\'t have any other choice.
But I think, in this similar situation, boss might let him go for having a vacation since, even if, he went to office for a work, he might not concentrate well, and the result also would not be good.
>>But I think, in this similar situation, the boss might let him go to have a vacation since, even if, he went to office for a work, he might not concentrate well, and the result would not be good.
Anyways, I believe in truth sentence, which are famous like a alchemy’s raw called exchange of equivalent, “if you want to get something, you should give up another thing,”
>>Anyways, I believe in a true sentence, which is famous like an alchemy’s raw called exchange of equivalent, “If you want to get something, you should give up another thing.\"
It means, if you want to spend time with your family, you should give up earning money a lot.
>>It means, if you want to spend time with your family, you should give up earning a lot of money.
On the other hand, another means, if you want to earn money a lot, you should give up your free time owing to the continuous work to do.
>>CORRECT!
Actually, it is hard to be handle making it balanced.
>>Actually, it is hard to make it balanced.
That’s why I am working until now in the office…I got a get to work again so I just finish this writing.
>> That’s why I am still working in the office, I got to work again, so I will just finish this writing.
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