109. Homework
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강사 첨삭
They always say, \"Prevention is better than cure.\"
Thank you very much for your logical homework, Jason!
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ESSAY: How do you prepare for unexpected events?
>>CORRECT!
I don’t know what kind of unexpected events I need to prepare.
>>I don’t know what kind of unexpected events I need to prepare for.
But, there are somethings that I have been preparing.
>> But, there are some things that I have been preparing.
First, I have been saving money from all incomes including salary and bonus since I received my first salary from a previous company.
>>First, I have been saving money from all the income including salary and bonus since I received my first salary from my previous company.
Because I am afraid of that I must pay huge amount of money for a buying house, car or something if I need to require it.
>>Because I am afraid that I must pay a huge amount of money to buy a house, car or something if I need it.
And I think it\'s better saving money in the bank instead of paying interest to the card company
>>And I think it\'s better to save money in the bank instead of paying interest to the card company.
Second, I have been paying insurance monthly.
>>Second, I have been paying for my insurance monthly.
That’s because I have a possibility, even it is a just little, to meet a cancer problem since my aunt was gone owing to the disease.
>>That’s because I have a possibility, even it is a just little, to acquire cancer since my aunt was gone owing to that disease.
Third, I take medicine including multiple vitamins to prevent some illness.
>>Third, I take a medicine including multiple vitamins to prevent some illness.
I got a lot of different disease that I have never experienced before.
>>I got a lot of different diseases that I had never experienced before.
Fourth, I study English every early morning Monday to Friday.
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Since I think, someday, I might get a good chance such as promotion, good offer, or position because of the reason I can speak English.
>>Since I think, someday, I might get a good chance such as promotion, good offer, or position because I can speak English.
Fifth, I give pocket money to my parents monthly as soon as I receive my salary from the company.
>>CORRECT!
Because, I don’t want to see the situation that they meet a problem about finance.
>>Because, I don’t want to them to have a financial problem.
Furthermore, I try to have dinner outside with my family because life is not infinity to everyone and we don’t know who will go back to the nature first.
>>Furthermore, I try to have dinner outside with my family because life is not infinite to everyone, and we don’t know who will go back to nature first.
Hence, I just enjoy and spend my time with them as possible as I can.
>>CORRECT!
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