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Today I wanna tell the recent social issue. That is the college tuition fee. It's too expensive.I have two children. Times goes by, they're going to go to college. I also have to pay the college tuition fee.I think that our country is the most ethusiastic and strongest about the educational fever to their children all over the world. So lots of companies make the money using these korean phenomenon eventhough government. Next year, there is a president election. One of parties can give a solution about these tuitions or payment of educaional fee. It affects the result of election. All of people must think over and solve this educational fee's problem. I wish that the government propose the best solution as soon as possible. This is the shortest way to be a advanced country.

Hello [이름]! I've heard about the tuition fee increase in Korea and that a lot of students are protesting against it. I hope that they will find a better way to deal with this problem. Or if they increase the tuition fee then they should have the best teachers to teach your children because if not it will all go to waste. See you in class tomorrow! T.Faye   Here are some of your corrections: Today I wanna tell the recent social issue. >>Today, I want to tell you about the recent social issue. That is the college tuition fee. >>The college tuiotion fee.  It's too expensive. >>Correct! I have two children. >>Correct! Times goes by, they're going to go to college. >>As time comes, they're going to college. I also have to pay the college tuition fee. >>Correct! I think that our country is the most ethusiastic and strongest about the educational fever to their children all over the world. >>I think that our country is the most enthusiastic and strongest when it comes to education. So lots of companies make the money using these korean phenomenon eventhough government.>>So lots of companies and the government make money with these kinds of phenomenon. Next year, there is a president election. >>We will be having a presidential election next year. One of parties can give a solution about these tuitions or payment of educaional fee.>>One of the parties have a solution for the tuition fees. It affects the result of election. >>It will affect the result of the election.  All of people must think over and solve this educational fee's problem. >>The people should think this through and find ways to solve these problems. I wish that the government propose the best solution as soon as possible. >>I wish the government would propose the best solution about this as soon as possible.  This is the shortest way to be a advanced country. >>This is the shortes way to be an advanced country.