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2018-11-02 · 첨삭 강사 Jean

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>> Should the media show graphic violence? Why or why not? My opinion is that the media should show graphic violence in only partially cases. It is possible only when it is under the situation for the public good with the political correctness and young viewers is cared by their protectors. The virtural stimulus can cause more public attention is the obvious fact. If we can only use it in properly and correctly, we should use it in order for society to move in the right direction.

강사 첨삭

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Jean

Should the media show graphic violence? Why or why not?

My opinion is that the media should show graphic violence in only partially cases.

>> I believe that the media shouldn\'t show everything when it comes to graphic violence.

It is possible only when it is under the situation for the public good with the political correctness and young viewers is cared by their protectors.

>> They should only show the details when it is for the public good and the young viewers are guided by their guardians or parents.

The virtural stimulus can cause more public attention is the obvious fact.

>> The virtual stimulus can cause more public attention that the obvious fact.

If we can only use it in properly and correctly, we should use it in order for society to move in the right direction.

>> If the media could only use their platform properly and correctly, our should be able to movie into the right direction.

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