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2020-11-03 · 첨삭 강사 Fiona

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Well, I think that I don’t spend more money in December than during the rest of the year. That’s because I also spend a lot of money for my vacation such as summer and winter season. I especially spend money a lot to summer vacation for my family. I have plan to trip for summer vacation in advance. For instance, I search for place where I’d like to go somewhere. And I looking for hotel that I stayed during summer vacation. Then I booked accommodation. When I spend time there, I enjoy to time with my family to have a meal at famous local restaurant. Additionally, we visit to landmark as well and we go trip here and there. I seems to be spend time there around 5 days. On the other hand, I spend so many time at home especially for winter vacation in December. Also, I’d like to stay in home for Christmas because the people were crowded at somewhere like a tourist spot. I don’t like people crowed in somewhere as well as my family. So that, I don’t spend big money especially in December.

강사 첨삭

Good evening Mr. [이름]^^ 
Well, December and January are the months where I spend a lot of money! 
It\'s where my family and I gather together and spend our vacation chatting and catching up. 
Thank you Mr. [이름] for sharing^^ 

Well, I think that I don’t spend more money in December than during the rest of the year. 
>>> Well, I don\'t think I spend more money than the rest of December.
That’s because I also spend a lot of money for my vacation such as summer and winter season. 
>>> Because I also spend a lot of money during summer and winter vacation.
I especially spend money a lot to summer vacation for my family. 
>>> I spend a lot of money especially during the summer vacation for my family.
I have plan to trip for summer vacation in advance. 
>>> I am planning to go on a trip in advance during the summer vacation.
For instance, I search for place where I’d like to go somewhere. 
>>> For example, I look for a place that I want to go.
And I looking for hotel that I stayed during summer vacation. 
>>> And I look for a hotel. 
Then I booked accommodation. 
>>> Then I booked for the accommodation. 
When I spend time there, I enjoy to time with my family to have a meal at famous local restaurant. 
>>> When I spend time there, I enjoy eating at a famous local restaurant with my family.
Additionally, we visit to landmark as well and we go trip here and there. 
>>> I also visit landmarks and travel here and there.
I seems to be spend time there around 5 days. 
>>> It seems that I have spend 5 days there. 
On the other hand, I spend so many time at home especially for winter vacation in December. 
>>> On the other hand, I spend a lot of time at home, especially in December for the winter vacation.
Also, I’d like to stay in home for Christmas because the people were crowded at somewhere like a tourist spot. 
>>> Also, I want to stay at home on Christmas because there are so many people in places like tourist attractions.
I don’t like people crowed in somewhere as well as my family. 
>>> I don\'t like people flocking somewhere, not just in my family.
So that, I don’t spend big money especially in December.
>>> So I don\'t spend a lot of money especially in December.

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