11/08 homework

2010-11-08 · 첨삭 강사 Verna

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I have a member of a lot of social networking sites. So whenever I log in the sites, I confuse ID and password. Even though I usually add the site on my favorites list, it is hard to find the site that I joined before. And my IDs on sites are different from every sites, so I can’t memorize all IDs. To use easily, I save my id on excel file and my diary whenever I join new sites. --------------------------------------------------------- When I look into the night sky I usually see constellation. Because I don’t exactly the location of zodiac sign in the sky, I can only make a division star and moon. (The Big Differ is only thing that I can find.) And nowadays the night sky isn’t clear rather than before, we can find many stars when we trip the place where have good air.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름],    I think you had a great weekend because you were very busy. I also joined a lot of social networking sites but I like Facebook the most.  In order for me not to forget my ID's and passwords, I write them down. Anyway, thanks for writing your composition. See you tomorrow! Love, Verna  I have a member of a lot of social networking sites. >> I am a member of a lot of social networking sites.So whenever I log in the sites, I confuse ID and password. So whenever I log on the sites, I'm confused of the ID's and passwords to use.Even though I usually add the site on my favorites list, it is hard to find the site that I joined before. >> CorrectAnd my IDs on sites are different from every sites, so I can’t memorize all IDs. >>And ny ID on every sites are different so I can't memorize them all.To use easily, I save my id on excel file and my diary whenever I join new sites. >>To have a better access, I try to save my ID's on excel files and my diary whenever I join new sites.---------------------------------------------------------When I look into the night sky I usually see constellation. >> CorrectBecause I don’t exactly the location of zodiac sign in the sky, I can only make a division star and moon. (The Big Differ is only thing that I can find.) >>Because I don't exactly know the location of zodiac sign in the sky, I can only make a division star and moon. (The Big Dipper is the only thing I can find.)And nowadays the night sky isn’t clear rather than before, we can find many stars when we trip the place where have good air. >>And nowadays the night sky isn't as clear as before, we can find many stars when we go to a  trip in places where we have good air.

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