11.10 Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
Hi Kelly! It's a nice to hear your voice again! Good afternoon!
Why do people immigrate to other countries?
I think that living another country with a completely different culture can be hard for us. but many people want to live in other countries. I think that the reasons for that are two options. The first one is education of their children.They might make a decision on immigration because they think their kids will be learned more easily in other countries. The other reason is taking a new opportunity, but there are a lot of new difficulties to live in other countries.
Thank you!
강사 첨삭
Hello Mr. [이름]!
Welcome back to Power English!
I enjoyed our class this morning. Thank you so much. Anyway, here\'s my correction to your homework.
~Kelly^^
Hi Kelly! It\'s a nice to hear your voice again! Good afternoon!>> Correct.Why do people immigrate to other countries?I think that living another country with a completely different culture can be hard for us.
>> Correct.
but many people want to live in other countries.
>> Correct.***But
I think that the reasons for that are two options.
>> I think that there are two options that we can consider when living abroad.
The first one is education of their children.
>> Correct.
They might make a decision on immigration because they think their kids will be learned more easily in other countries.
>> They might consider immigrating to another country because they think their kids will learn more easily.
The other reason is taking a new opportunity, but there are a lot of new difficulties to live in other countries.>> The other reason is taking a new opportunity, but there are a lot of new difficulties that people encounter when living in other countries.Thank you!
>> Correct.
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