11/11 homework
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Yes, I do.
Nowadays, many politicians are doing SNS like Instagram, Facebook, and Twitter and they are using the technology for politics.
It is doing the role of media.
I think the smartphone became another very closer world now.
For young people, the most painful punishment might prohibit the smartphone.
I will do it, too.
Smartphone substitutes many things such as TV, radio, computer, music player.
So, modern people\'s house is changing for a small family.
I live alone now.
There is no TV, radio, computer, music player in my home.
I watching TV and listening to the radio on my smartphone application.
I usually work in my office and sometimes I check the file with my notebook or smartphone.
This is very common nowadays.
I think that smartphone technology offers both advantages and disadvantages.
And we should choose and use it well by ourselves.
Nevertheless, the restriction of the smartphone is the refusing of modern benefit from the high-technology.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]! Thank you for accomplishing and sending your homework on time. I really appreciate your consistency with dong your homework!. It works well to your advantage because as I have noticed you write good and well thought of essays. Nice job. Keep it up! ^^
I totally agree with you too, smartphones have really taken over our lives, most in good ways but overdoing it may also have it\'s disadvantages! ^ ^
-Teacher Jedah
Yes, I do.
>>CORRECT
Nowadays, many politicians are doing SNS like Instagram, Facebook, and Twitter and they are using the technology for politics.
Nowadays, many politicians are doing SNS like Instagram, Facebook, and Twitter and they are using the technology for politics.
>>CORRECT
It is doing the role of media.
It is doing the role of media.
>>CORRECT
I think the smartphone became another very closer world now.
I think the smartphone became another very closer world now.
>>I think smartphones have created another world for us. (I hope this is what you meant. ^ ^)
For young people, the most painful punishment might prohibit the smartphone.
For young people, the most painful punishment might prohibit the smartphone.
>>For young people, the most painful punishment might be prohibiting them the use of their smartphones.
I will do it, too.
I will do it, too.
>>I will feel the same too.
Smartphone substitutes many things such as TV, radio, computer, music player.
Smartphone substitutes many things such as TV, radio, computer, music player.
>>CORRECT
So, modern people\'s house is changing for a small family.
So, modern people\'s house is changing for a small family.
>>CORRECT
I live alone now.
I live alone now.
>>CORRECT
There is no TV, radio, computer, music player in my home.
>>CORRECT
I watching TV and listening to the radio on my smartphone application.
I watching TV and listening to the radio on my smartphone application.
>>I watch TV and listen to the radio on my smartphone application.
I usually work in my office and sometimes I check the file with my notebook or smartphone.
I usually work in my office and sometimes I check the file with my notebook or smartphone.
>>CORRECT
This is very common nowadays.
This is very common nowadays.
>>CORRECT
I think that smartphone technology offers both advantages and disadvantages.
I think that smartphone technology offers both advantages and disadvantages.
>>CORRECT
And we should choose and use it well by ourselves.
And we should choose and use it well by ourselves.
>>And we should choose and use it well.
Nevertheless, the restriction of the smartphone is the refusing of modern benefit from the high-technology.
Nevertheless, the restriction of the smartphone is the refusing of modern benefit from the high-technology.
>>Nevertheless, the restriction of smartphone use is refusing the benefits of modern and advanced technology.
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