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2018-11-13 · 첨삭 강사 Jean

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>> Do you think your country needs more or less immigrants? Explain your answer. I think our country needs more immigrants as a member of the international community. However now isn\'t the proper time that opens widely this country\'s border. Korea doesn\'t prepare infrastructures, receptive mind and resonable policies for immigrants. Having more immigrants just brings massive conflicts for now.

강사 첨삭

Hello!^^

Thank you for sending your homework.

Cheers!
Jean

Do you think your country needs more or less immigrants? Explain your answer.

I think our country needs more immigrants as a member of the international community.

>> I think that as a member of the international community, Korea needs more immigrants.

However now isn\'t the proper time that opens widely this country\'s border.

>> However, now isn\'t the right time to open our border.

Korea doesn\'t prepare infrastructures, receptive mind and resonable policies for immigrants.

>> Korea isn\'t ready in terms of infrastructure, receptive mind, and reasonable policy for immigrants.

Having more immigrants just brings massive conflicts for now.

>> For now, having more immigrants in the country will just bring massive conflicts.

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