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>> What are your thoughts on the unemployment rate in your country?
I think Korea\\\'s the unemployment rate is quite high. Many company recruite only few job seekers because economy is kind of slow these days. Besides most people who graduated from college want to go to big companies and then competition is also high. In this case, the period of job hunting and preparing for job cannot help being long. As a result, If the time of job hunting is proceeded to be about one year, this time i think we need to lower our sights a bit and we go to any company for pileing up experiences.
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>> What are your thoughts on the unemployment rate in your country?
I think Korea\'s the unemployment rate is quite high.
>> or: As I see it, Korea\'s the unemployment rate is rather high.
Many company recruite only few job seekers because economy is kind of slow these days.
>> Many companies recruit only few job seekers because the economy is kind of slow these days.
Besides most people who graduated from college want to go to big companies and then competition is also high.
>> Besides, most people who graduated from college want to go to big companies and then the competition is also high.
In this case, the period of job hunting and preparing for job cannot help being long.
>> In this case, one cannot avoid having a long period of job hunting and preparation for the same.
As a result, If the time of job hunting is proceeded to be about one year, this time i think we need to lower our sights a bit and we go to any company for pileing up experiences.
>> As a result, If the time of job hunting takes about one year, this time, I think we need to lower our personal standard a bit and go to any company to earn experiences.
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