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2019-11-12 · 첨삭 강사 Jedah

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[When was the first time you thought life was great? What happened?] I met my husband in 2013. We have been met for one year and prepared the wedding for one year. When we went to the honeymoon after the wedding ceremony, I suddenly thought things that have happened to us in the past. It was a long and beautiful story to us. My mother and father have been met with each other for a very long time ago, and my parents-in-law too. And, they gave birth to a baby in different cities and a different time, me and my husband. We had absolutely different life before meeting each other for about 30 years. We will live together as a family for forwarding about 30 years. I think it is like magic. People have a story like this, respectively. So, when I think about this kind of story, I think life is great. I absolutely agree with the words of Charlie Chaplin, \'life is a tragedy when seen in close-up, but a comedy in long-shot\'.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]! As always I appreciate you and the effort you put in your homework. ^ ^
Nice thoughts you have here. We meet different people in our lives but there is always the one that is meant for us. Really, what kind of magic is that? I wonder if it is fate or destiny. Do you believe in them? ^ ^
-Teacher Jedah

I met my husband in 2013.
>>CORRECT
We have been met for one year and prepared the wedding for one year.
>>We dated for a year and prepared for the wedding a year after. (I hope I got this one right. ^ ^)
When we went to the honeymoon after the wedding ceremony, I suddenly thought things that have happened to us in the past.
>>When we went on a honeymoon after the wedding, I suddenly thought of the things that have happened to us in the past.
It was a long and beautiful story to us.
>>CORRECT
My mother and father have been met with each other for a very long time ago, and my parents-in-law too.
>>My mother and father met each other a long time ago, and so did my parents-in-law.
And, they gave birth to a baby in different cities and a different time, me and my husband.
>>And, they gave birth to babies in different cities and in a different time; that would be me and my husband.
We had absolutely different life before meeting each other for about 30 years.
>>We had absolutely lived different lives for thirty years before we met.
We will live together as a family for forwarding about 30 years.
>>We will live together as a family for even as long as thirty years. (I hope this is what you mean.)
I think it is like magic.
>>CORRECT
People have a story like this, respectively.
>>People do have the same story as mine.
So, when I think about this kind of story, I think life is great.
>>CORRECT
I absolutely agree with the words of Charlie Chaplin, \'life is a tragedy when seen in close-up, but a comedy in long-shot\'.
>>CORRECT

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