11/13 homework
학생이 쓴 원문
A year ago, I wanted to work as much as possible to publish more papers and performance.
So, I saved the time to enjoy my life with cultural activities and exercise, and I spent my time in the office.
I have been published a lot of paper, have been applied for many universities and research institutes and was left out many times.
It made me tired and depressed.
My life was so simple and boring.
I started swimming a month ago.
Actually, I started swimming due to my younger brother who wants to pass a swimming test to be the police.
But, it made me realized many things.
Firstly, my feeling and emotion were changed a lot.
I think I relive the stress after sweating and spend my energy.
Before starting swimming, I thought that I will be tired after exercising and can not work.
But, my thought was absolutely wrong.
I get the energy from swimming and can work actively even after exercise.
This is a new understanding in almost 30 years.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]! Thank you for your homework. I appreciate the effort you have put in it. ^ ^
I definitely agree with you. I\'ve been going to the gym for a few months now, and I noticed that I still do have a lot of energy despite the strenuous exercises given to me by my personal trainer. And I\'ve become more positive and calm. Exercise rids us of negative feelings and of course stress. And, it\'s not a matter of loosing weight but keeping yourself healthy, that for me is the most important! ^ ^
-Teacher Jedah
>>A year ago, I wanted to work as much as possible to publish more papers and have a good performance.
So, I saved the time to enjoy my life with cultural activities and exercise, and I spent my time in the office.
So, I saved the time to enjoy my life with cultural activities and exercise, and I spent my time in the office.
>>So, I put aside exercising and cultural activities but spent most of my time at the office.
I have been published a lot of paper, have been applied for many universities and research institutes and was left out many times.
I have been published a lot of paper, have been applied for many universities and research institutes and was left out many times.
>>I have published a lot of paper, have applied to many universities and research institutes and I felt left out many times.
It made me tired and depressed.
It made me tired and depressed.
>>CORRECT
My life was so simple and boring.
My life was so simple and boring.
>>CORRECT
I started swimming a month ago.
I started swimming a month ago.
>>CORRECT
Actually, I started swimming due to my younger brother who wants to pass a swimming test to be the police.
Actually, I started swimming due to my younger brother who wants to pass a swimming test to be the police.
>>Actually, the reason I started swimming again is because of my younger brother who wants to pass the swimming test to become a police officer.
But, it made me realized many things.
But, it made me realized many things.
>>But, it made me realize many things.
Firstly, my feeling and emotion were changed a lot.
Firstly, my feeling and emotion were changed a lot.
>>Primarily, my feelings and emotions have changed a lot.
I think I relive the stress after sweating and spend my energy.
I think I relive the stress after sweating and spend my energy.
>>I think I\'m relieved of stress after I sweat and have more physical activities.
Before starting swimming, I thought that I will be tired after exercising and can not work.
Before starting swimming, I thought that I will be tired after exercising and can not work.
>>Before I started swimming, I thought that I will feel more tired and not able to work.
But, my thought was absolutely wrong.
But, my thought was absolutely wrong.
>>But what I thought was absolutely wrong.
I get the energy from swimming and can work actively even after exercise.
I get the energy from swimming and can work actively even after exercise.
>>I have more energy and can work actively even after swimming.
This is a new understanding in almost 30 years.
This is a new understanding in almost 30 years.
>>This is what I have come to realize after 30 years.
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