11/15 homework
학생이 쓴 원문
Sometimes when I was so busy, I can not remember why I was busy after finish a day.
We need time to aware and think alone.
I think it is very important for kids.
Surely experiencing new things is also important to kids because they can learn anything it is able to affect their life and personality.
But, excessive activities or education make them confusing.
It is possible to obstruct their thought and ideas.
Since they have to move to the next activity they can not seriously feel and think about the activity.
If so, they can not know what I like to do or what is my favorite hobby.
On the other hand, there is a related social issue in Korea.
Young children finish school very early and so their parents can not be with them before leaving their office.
So, they sent children to private institutes for the safety of them.
We have many things which have to change and enhance.
Anyway, so the balance of the activities and reviewing or thinking is very important to both adults and kids.
강사 첨삭
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-Teacher Jedah
Sometimes when I was so busy, I can not remember why I was busy after finish a day.
>>Sometimes when I\'m busy, I couldn\'t even remember how my busy day was.
We need time to aware and think alone.
>>We need time to be aware and think alone.
I think it is very important for kids.
I think it is very important for kids.
>>CORRECT
Surely experiencing new things is also important to kids because they can learn anything it is able to affect their life and personality.
Surely experiencing new things is also important to kids because they can learn anything it is able to affect their life and personality.
>>Surely experiencing something new is also important to kids as it can also affect their lives and personality.
But, excessive activities or education make them confusing.
But, excessive activities or education make them confusing.
>>But, excessive activities or education make them confused.
It is possible to obstruct their thought and ideas.
It is possible to obstruct their thought and ideas.
>>CORRECT
Since they have to move to the next activity they can not seriously feel and think about the activity.
Since they have to move to the next activity they can not seriously feel and think about the activity.
>>Since they have to move to the next activity they can not seriously feel and think about the activity at hand.
If so, they can not know what I like to do or what is my favorite hobby.
If so, they can not know what I like to do or what is my favorite hobby.
>>If so, they can not know what activities they would like.
On the other hand, there is a related social issue in Korea.
On the other hand, there is a related social issue in Korea.
>>CORRECT
Young children finish school very early and so their parents can not be with them before leaving their office.
Young children finish school very early and so their parents can not be with them before leaving their office.
>>CORRECT
So, they sent children to private institutes for the safety of them.
So, they sent children to private institutes for the safety of them.
>>So, they send their children to private institutes for their safety.
We have many things which have to change and enhance.
We have many things which have to change and enhance.
>>CORRECT
Anyway, so the balance of the activities and reviewing or thinking is very important to both adults and kids.
Anyway, so the balance of the activities and reviewing or thinking is very important to both adults and kids.
>>CORRECT
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