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2019-11-25 · 첨삭 강사 Jean

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>> What would you do if someone told you he/she is thinking about suicide? If my any one of them who are close to me is thinking about suicide, there would be nothing i can do for him or her. Even if i gave them comfort or advice, they couldn\'t hear my sincere talk because everything depends on the way they look at things. I think it is really sad thing. I always think that it is quite hard to have healthy inner mind. However, it can be easy if we change our thinking. Threre are a lot of people who are poor and have difficulties in many way or unexpected accidents. We don\'t need to be perfect. We can just know thanks to god or our loved people. We can just feel thankful to be living.

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Thank you for sending your homework. This is the best composition you\'ve sent so far. Well done! Speak tomorrow! 



Cheers!
Jean




>> What would you do if someone told you he/she is thinking about suicide?

If my any one of them who are close to me is thinking about suicide, there would be nothing i can do for him or her. 
>> In anyone close to me is thinking about suicide, there would be nothing I can do for him or her. 

Even if i gave them comfort or advice, they couldn\'t hear my sincere talk because everything depends on the way they look at things. 
>> Even if I give them comfort or advice, they couldn\'t hear my sincerity because everything depends on the way they look at things. 

I think it is really sad thing.
>> I think it is really a sad thing. 

 I always think that it is quite hard to have healthy inner mind.
>> I always think that it is quite hard to have a healthy inner mind.

 However, it can be easy if we change our thinking. 
>>  However, it can be easy if we change our mindset. 

Threre are a lot of people who are poor and have difficulties in many way or unexpected accidents. 
>> There are a lot of people who are poor and have difficulties in many ways or unexpected accidents. 

We don\'t need to be perfect. 
>> correct

We can just know thanks to god or our loved people. 
>> We can just thank god or our loved ones. 

We can just feel thankful to be living.
>> We can just feel thankful to be alive. 

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