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2018-12-03 · 첨삭 강사 Jedah

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[Should the government place a tax on junk food and fatty snacks?] I don’t think so. Most consumer of junk food is people who have not so much money due to the inexpensive price and convenience. Rich men have organic or healthy food with many kind of nutrient regardless of the price. There are statistical report that poor people have high possibility to be fat due to the junk food. When I went to junk food restaurant in USA, there were many labor. The junk food is cheap, and we can to back to work quickly because it is easy to eat rapidly. I think the government should take effort to decrease a tax for organic or healthy food. If so, poor people can buy more healthy food. In Korea, organic material is too expensive, I also often choose non-organic material because of the price. Anyway, I think the imposition of tax for junk food and fatty snacks is not good solution to public.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]! Thank you for doing your homework. I appreciate it! ^ ^

Your thoughts on this one is remarkable! We have a very bad system when it comes to imposing taxes! I would have to agree with you, make organic food a lot cheaper where it would be affordable to the general consumers. What a wonderful world would it be. Everybody happy and healthy! ^ ^

-Teacher Jedah



I don’t think so.

>>Correct
Most consumer of junk food is people who have not so much money due to the inexpensive price and convenience.

>>Most consumers of junk foods are people who don\'t have enough money and can\'t afford expensive goods and conveniences.
Rich men have organic or healthy food with many kind of nutrient regardless of the price.

>>Rich men can afford organic or healthy food packed with nutrients regardless of the price.
There are statistical report that poor people have high possibility to be fat due to the junk food.

>>There is a statistical report that poor people have a high possibility to be fat due to junk foods. 
When I went to junk food restaurant in USA, there were many labor.

>>When I went to a junk food restaurant in the USA, there were many consumers. 
The junk food is cheap, and we can to back to work quickly because it is easy to eat rapidly.

>>Junk foods are cheap, and we can go back to work quickly because we can eat them easily and rapidly. 
I think the government should take effort to decrease a tax for organic or healthy food.

>>I think the government should take effort to decrease tax for organic or healthy food.
If so, poor people can buy more healthy food.

>>Correct
In Korea, organic material is too expensive, I also often choose non-organic material because of the price.

>>Correct 
Anyway, I think the imposition of tax for junk food and fatty snacks is not good solution to public.

>>Anyway, I think the imposition of tax for junk foods and fatty snacks is not a good solution for the public.

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