11/21 homework
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Hi [이름]!! Thank you for devoting time for your homework! I appreciate it! You gave a wonderful view on this one. ^ ^
I agree with what you have said. Animal testing should have a strict regulation. Besides same as we are, we have to recognize their rights too! ^ ^
-Teacher Jedah
Long long time ago, animals are foods and clothes to maintaining life.
>>A long time ago, animals were consumed and their furs were used as clothes for maintaining life.
However, many people keep a pet nowadays.
>>However, many people keep animals as pets these days.
So, they regard animal as a creature that have equal right with human.
>>So, now they are regarded as creatures with rights.
A pet is a member of family, in other words, it is a daughter or son to someone including my mom.
>>A pet is considered to be a member of the family, in other words, it is a daughter or son to someone; just like my mom is with our pets.
It means we are upset or sympathize to behavior that the animals is considered just as object to care human, such as for scientific research.
>>It means we feel upset and we sympathize with animals most especially when they are used as objects for scientific research.
I know still so many animals are dying by a scientific research in cosmetic or medical industry.
>>I also know that so many animals are dying because of a scientific research in cosmetics or in the medical industry.
But, I can not unconditionally oppose to that research, because human should not be subject to the scientific research.
>>But, I can not unconditionally oppose to that research, because humans should not be used as a subject to scientific research either.
Surely we have to decrease the experiment using animals.
>>Surely we have to decrease the use of animals in experimental researches.
At least, the legal system should be controlled more strictly for the experiments and unnecessary animals’ death should be punished.
>>Correct
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