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2018-11-23 · 첨삭 강사 Jean

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>>Is obesity immoral when so many people in the world are starving? I think that those are seperate problems. Living in the global sociaty doesn\'t mean that we should share every experience. We don\'t need to starve just like them because of they are starving now. \'Trying to help with them is the moral behavior \' is the fact however, trying not to help with them doesn\'t mean that it is the immoral behavior. Those are personal choices and no one can force.

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Jean

>>Is obesity immoral when so many people in the world are starving?

I think that those are seperate problems.

>> I think that those are separate problems.

Living in the global sociaty doesn\'t mean that we should share every experience.

>> Living in a global society doesn\'t necessarily mean that we should share every experience.

We don\'t need to starve just like them because of they are starving now.

>> We don\'t need to starve just because other people are suffering from starvation.

\'Trying to help with them is the moral behavior \' is the fact however, trying not to help with them doesn\'t mean that it is the immoral behavior.

>> Helping the people in need is a moral behavior however, not doing anything doesn\'t make one immoral.

Those are personal choices and no one can force.

>> To help on not to help is one\'s choice and shouldn\'t be forced.

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