11/22 homework
학생이 쓴 원문
Driving own car is very convenient because people could go anywhere anytime.
Especially, driving is so useful on the season when the weather is too hot or cold to walk outside.
However, people should keep some points to drive safely.
Using mobile phone during driving is too dangerous.
So I try not to use mobile phone as far as possible.
If I have to call someone, I used to connect bluetooth to get my both hands free.
Also, I keep the speed limit.
It\'s important to concentrate on driving, so I listen to music or radio with low volume.
강사 첨삭
Hi there. Dr. [이름]!
Driving is a very important skill. As a doctor, you need to be mobile and ready anytime your patient needs help. Anyway, driving safely is the top priority on the road. It is a matter of life and death. So, focus on the drive and keep your eyes on the road at all times.
Below are my grammar suggestions to some of your sentences. Of courese you got so many sentences correctly and I am so glad about them! Once again, the use of \'the\' is one common suggestion. Please go over thme below.
Thank you very much for your time and effort in writing this composition!
-T. Donna~
>> Driving one\'s own car is very convenient because people could go anywhere anytime.
Especially, driving is so useful on the season when the weather is too hot or cold to walk outside.
Especially, driving is so useful on the season when the weather is too hot or cold to walk outside.
>> Correct!
Or: Driving is so useful on the season especially when the weather is too hot or cold to walk outside.
However, people should keep some points to drive safely.
>> Correct!
Using mobile phone during driving is too dangerous.
>> Correct!
So I try not to use mobile phone as far as possible.
>> So I try not to use the mobile phone as much as possible.
If I have to call someone, I used to connect bluetooth to get my both hands free.
>> If I have to call someone, I used to connect the bluetooth to get both of my hands free.
Also, I keep the speed limit.
>> Correct!
It\'s important to concentrate on driving, so I listen to music or radio with low volume.
>> Correct!
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