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2018-11-26 · 첨삭 강사 Jean

학생이 쓴 원문

>> What do you think of your country’s (modern/traditional) architecture? The traditional architecture of Korea is billiant in one word. Every part of Korean traditional architecture has practicality, functionality and beauty. However, Korean modern architecture is busy to imitate Western architecture and seems like to forget all their traditional sharpness. I understand that Korean traditional architectural style is different from modern demand, but I think it is important to have an identity by looking for a compromise with tradition.

강사 첨삭

Hello!^^

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Cheers!
Jean

What do you think of your country’s (modern/traditional) architecture?

The traditional architecture of Korea is billiant in one word.
>> correct

Every part of Korean traditional architecture has practicality, functionality and beauty.
>> Every part of Korean traditional architecture has practicality, functionality, and beauty.

However, Korean modern architecture is busy to imitate Western architecture and seems like to forget all their traditional sharpness.
>> However, Korean modern architecture is busy imitating Western architecture and it seems that they already forgot their identity.

I understand that Korean traditional architectural style is different from modern demand, but I think it is important to have an identity by looking for a compromise with tradition.
>> I understand that Korean traditional architectural style is different from modern demands, but I think it is important to have and maintain an identity by looking for a compromise.

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