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2020-11-24 · 첨삭 강사 Rachel

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It depends on the items that need fixing or changing. If it is electronic home appliances, I never try to fix myself. I have a lot of experiences of failure when I try to fix something electronic devices it just becomes obsolete. When I fix myself, there is a very important point. The fixed result from me will be worse than that of an expert. Therefore, I have to be able to admit my clumsy skills or mistakes. When I decorate or fix house items myself, affection for my home grows and I feel more comfortable with the house. And finally, I feel the house is a sweet home. I like a simple style house, so I will not fill up my home with many furniture or electronic application. My house that I will move to tomorrow is an apartment. So, the control office can help me with many things that I need fixing or changing. But, If I live in a private house, not an apartment, I should fix and change many things myself.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름]!
It\'s been a while since I read your homework, and so, thanks for this. I guess, the most important thing is that the house has a warm atmosphere and anyone who visits will feel comfortable and relaxed. ^ ^
-Rachel
It depends on the items that need fixing or changing.
>> correct 
If it is electronic home appliances, I never try to fix myself.
>> correct
>> OR: If the damaged item is an electric appliance, I don\'t dare to fix it myself.
I have a lot of experiences of failure when I try to fix something electronic devices it just becomes obsolete.
>> I have a lot of experiences fixing electronic devices and they just become completely useless. 
When I fix myself, there is a very important point.
>> When I fix something myself, expect one thing. 
The fixed result from me will be worse than that of an expert.
>> The result will be worse than that of an unskilled person. 
Therefore, I have to be able to admit my clumsy skills or mistakes.
>> Therefore, I admit my clumsiness and inability to fix something electronic.
When I decorate or fix house items myself, affection for my home grows and I feel more comfortable with the house.
>> On the other hand, when I organize some things or decorate my house, I feel more comfortable knowing that I did something for my house.
And finally, I feel the house is a sweet home.
>> correct
I like a simple style house, so I will not fill up my home with many furniture or electronic application.
>> correct
My house that I will move to tomorrow is an apartment.
>> I will be moving to an apartment tomorrow. 
So, the control office can help me with many things that I need fixing or changing.
>> correct (we can also say the administration office instead of control office)
But, If I live in a private house, not an apartment, I should fix and change many things myself.
>> correct 

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