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2018-11-27 · 첨삭 강사 Jean

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>> What realistic changes would you make to your country's attitude toward education? In fact, education in Korea is very well structured from a pedagogical point of view. Korean education has recently undergone a lot of changes by changing the system from DBAE education system to STEAM education system. Also, since each educational system has its own set of goals, it is impossible to distinguish between what is wrong and what is good. So we can not say that the problem of Korean education is in the system. The problem of real Korean education lies with educators. This is a matter of work ethics and the greatest weakness of postmodern society, so to be able to say that Korean education is not bad at all, new values and ideas must be rooted in our society.

강사 첨삭

Hello!^^

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Cheers!
Jean

What realistic changes would you make to your country\'s attitude toward education?

In fact, education in Korea is very well structured from a pedagogical point of view. Korean education has recently undergone a lot of changes by changing the system from DBAE education system to STEAM education system.
>> The fact is, the education in Korea is very well-structured from a pedagogical point of view. The Korean education has recently undergone a number of changes such as changing the system from DBAE to STEAM education.

Also, since each educational system has its own set of goals, it is impossible to distinguish between what is wrong and what is good.
>> Also, since each education system has its own set of goals, it is almost impossible to say which is better.

So we can not say that the problem of Korean education is in the system.
>> Therefore, we cannot say that the problem of the Korean education is in the system.

The problem of real Korean education lies with educators.
>> The real problem lies with the educators.

This is a matter of work ethics and the greatest weakness of postmodern society, so to be able to say that Korean education is not bad at all, new values and ideas must be rooted in our society.
>> This is a matter of work ethics, which is the greatest weakness of postmodern society, so to be able to say that Korean education is not bad at all, new values and ideas must be rooted in our society.

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