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2018-12-03 · 첨삭 강사 Jedah

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[If we could make molecule-sized robots, what could we do with them?] If we could make robots in molecular scale, it will be useful to medical field. If so, we don't need to perform surgery or intolerable health check. Moreover, we can deliver a medicine to correct location in out body by using robot. It will be evolution, and I know many researchers are studying about this one. And even if it will be invented, the problem is cost. So, it takes quite long time to commercialize to public. Nowadays, one of the most interesting industry is medical or bio-technology. We want to live as long as possible, surely without any disease. I hope it will come to us as soon as possible before I die.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]! Thank you for doing your homework! Awesome thoughts on this one! ^ ^ This would be a very useful invention in the future especially when it comes to curing a lot of diseases. ^ ^

-Teacher Jedah


If we could make robots in molecular scale, it will be useful to medical field.

>>If we could make robots in a molecular scale, it will be useful in the medical field. 
If so, we don\'t need to perform surgery or intolerable health check.

>>Correct
Moreover, we can deliver a medicine to correct location in out body by using robot.

>>Moreover, we can easily transport a medicine to the exact location in our body using a robot. 
It will be evolution, and I know many researchers are studying about this one.

>>It will be a great scientific revolution, and I know many researchers are studying about this one.
And even if it will be invented, the problem is cost.

>>Correct
So, it takes quite long time to commercialize to public.

>>Correct

>>It will probably take a long time for it to become commercialized and accessible to the public.
Nowadays, one of the most interesting industry is medical or bio-technology.

>>Correct
We want to live as long as possible, surely without any disease.

>>Correct 
I hope it will come to us as soon as possible before I die.

>>Correct

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