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2019-11-26 · 첨삭 강사 Jedah

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I think that the most difficult thing is the absence of \'work-life balance\'. Many people have an interest in \'work-life balance\', we call as \'Wo-La-Bel\' in Korea. Korea was developed very quickly from the 1980s. It means many people work very hard in the company. In my parent\'s period, they worked six days per week and often worked overtime. And I also attend school on Saturday too. It was normal in the era. But nowadays, the world changed a lot. Most workers take a rest on the weekend and the official dinner parties are also decreasing to secure persona life. Students also go to school in only weekdays. And many companies are discussing \'a four-day workweek\' to enhance work efficiency and improve life value. But, many researchers are still struggling with the research and budget day and night. Research is fun and feels so rewarding, but sometimes it makes me tired. I am trying to find my own \'work-life balance\'. If I can find the value or way, I will be happier than now.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]! Thanks for your homework and your effort! I really appreciate it! ^ ^
WOW! This one is a well thought and well composed writing. Good job!  ^^
-Teacher Jedah

I think that the most difficult thing is the absence of \'work-life balance\'.
>> correct
Many people have an interest in \'work-life balance\', we call as \'Wo-La-Bel\' in Korea.
>> Many people have an interest in\'work-life balance\' and we call it as Wo-La-Bel in Korea.
Korea was developed very quickly from the 1980s.
>> Korea was developed quickly in the 1980s.
It means many people work very hard in the company.
>> correct
In my parents\' period, they worked six days per week and often worked overtime.
>> correct
And I also attend school on Saturday too.
>> I also attended school on Saturdays.
It was normal in the era.
>> It was normal in that era.
>> It was normal at that time.
But nowadays, the world changed a lot.
>> correct
Most workers take a rest on the weekend and the official dinner parties are also decreasing to secure persona life.
>> correct
Students also go to school in only weekdays.
>> Students also go to school only on weekdays.
And many companies are discussing \'a four-day workweek\' to enhance the work efficiency and improve life.
>> correct
But, many researchers are still struggling with the research and budget day and night.
>> correct
Research is fun and feels so rewarding, but sometimes it makes me tired.
>> correct
I am trying to find my own \'work-life balance\'.
>> correct
If I can find the value or way, I will be happier than now.
>> correct

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